zempasuchil: (puget sound)
zempasuchil ([personal profile] zempasuchil) wrote in [personal profile] be_themoon 2012-01-13 11:30 pm (UTC)

ahhhhh omgggg how are you so good

the repetition of December and the way it seperates the poem, where usually you would expect a month to start a sequence of different months, but it's all December.

surviving the way that made them bitter. Regardless
he is hungry.
they’re lucky to be
desperate
fists around stones
blinding lights.


omg. omg yes.

blazing in a way
that is fiercely abrupt
and inevitable
...
help is potent and poisonous.
help is back at the beginning
a point when the end
is barely distinct from the start
it will have to be
enough.


aaahhhhhh omg yes, there is your talent for endings that punch!

AND THE LAST STANZA IS 100% GREAT

<33333 how wonderful, B, you are fabulous <3

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